Ever since I was little I had always imagined what it would be like to have all I could see right in front of me, it was the whole world right in my eyesight! I was so happy my dream had finally come true. Even though I was in space I could still see the whole world before my eyes, it was wonderful, I wish this moment would last forever. I am now flying back to earth. As I pass through the atmosphere I start to see the very significant details like the sea and my hometown, Melbourne, Australia.
My goal was to think about the past as well as the present in the text.
The wind swept around the violin as the airplane flew over the yellow stage. It was the famous violinist Sherry Wilbur who was playing her number: The Zombies Have Eaten Enough. It was so good Sherry had to encore 2 times! And after that she had to sign about 26 autographs, do 15 reports for different channels and do 8 newspaper reports too! By the time Sherry had got to the hotel she was staying at she was so tired, she went straight to sleep without having any dinner at all! The next day Sherry went back to her hometown in North Melbourne.
My goal was to have a different point of view on the story.
It was very busy at the station, every day there were trains coming in and out, picking up and dropping off people from all over the city. Then suddenly one day a whistle blew and everyone disappeared, except one person who obviously was a bit slow on the uptake, but they soon cleared out too. Then when the next train arrived only one person came out to meet it. And they said:”there’s nobody here so why don’t you just keep going on to catch up on time”? So the train driver kept going to the next station to get back to his schedule.
This piece of writing also relates to my classroom learning on narratives. My goal was to not give all the detail or in other words show don’t tell.